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#1 Ari-san

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Posted 21 October 2008 - 06:53 PM

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Welcome one and all to the Poetry Corner! This is the place to post your original poems & lyrics, and share them with the rest of the MCMB family! It's also a great place to receive feedback on your creative pieces!

Please follow all MCMB and FP Guidelines, ensuring all poetry and lyrics are appropriate. Whilst, we acknowledge that poetry is a form of expression, please note that graphic reference to self-harm, violence, sex, etc. should not be posted here, simply because we do have younger members here. Please do try and ensure your poetry/lyrics remain at the PG-13 level.

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#2 thehealthyalternative

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Posted 21 October 2008 - 06:57 PM

YAY! First poster :)

Here's a short one:

Hair dye seemed to be her best friend
It hid bad cuts and it hid split ends
But the only thing it couldn't hide
Was the way she really felt inside.

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#3 Bella Catarina

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Posted 21 October 2008 - 07:10 PM

Ooh, I like that. <3



I recently had to write a poem for my English course, so to make it more interesting for me I decided to write it from the point of view of one of my main characters in the novel I'm writing... If it was an actual scene in the story it'd be much different, which is one of the reasons I found it so neat to write.

Hayride

Tracy’s fingers were chilled against mine as the hayride jumped up and down
Trundling through fields
Over soft grass I’d always imagined cutting down
The night sky above us quietly turning ink black from red
Stars appearing in the expanse, tiny diamonds surrounded by night
Her grip tightening in mine as we hit more bumps on the field,
Swerving to avoid cows awakened by headlights
The night was quiet but for the engine of the tractor pulling us,
The hay making small crinkling noises beneath us,
The wind whooshing past as we moved
We said nothing,
For we never did
But her hand in mine meant everything,
The harvest moon being lifted by the ink of the night meant everything,
As did the quiet,
And the whooshing,
The cows mooing in disgust as we passed,
The cranky engine of the tractor,
The driver calling out to warn us of another bump,
Tracy would tighten her grip again,
Bite her lip,
Gasp through the thin air as the bundle of hay rid of her for a second,
Lifting her an inch or so as the trailer hit something,
Her green eyes flashing with a dash of panic, just for that moment
I have come to think that I was her constant those days,
And she mine
In so many ways, she was the only thing I had in the world
So that night meant more than the words here can express,
Though it has no significance
My heart turns light as I remember
Her small gasp,
The quietness of her breathing,
And the thin sweater she folded around her shoulders
We were silent,
Watching the yellow moon continue to make its way up through the expanse of ink and stars
It wasn’t a full moon
If it had the moment wouldn’t have been whole in itself
For Tracy and I were far from whole
Anything that was
Would simply have ruined it






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#4 Avalon-Princess

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Posted 21 October 2008 - 07:24 PM

Here's one I recently wrote for English class. We had to write an ABC poem about book banning. I did mine from the point of view of the person banning the book. My teacher told me I should get it published. Oh, and we had to use puncuation to emphasize our points and things. We could also skip up to 5 letters. I skipped X and Z.

Decision

Anyone will tell you this book is not suitable to be read.
But not everyon has done something about it.
Children's minds are young and impressionable
Do you think it is a good idea to let them read this material?
Every book they read sticks with them. The
Fickle finds of children learn new things all the time.
Go ahead and petition this movement all you want. It won't do any good.
Here is a book that should never be read.
It's content is not appropriate for the minds of society.
Just read the summary and you will see that. It is
Killing the minds of children
Look in their innocent faces. You want to destroy that innocence?
Many more are agreeing with me on this point.
No child should read this horrid, morbid story.
Ostracize the books from others. Take it off the shelves.
Put it's name on the banned book list.
Question my descision, but I believe it should not be read.
Rigorous action must be taken to ban this book.
Should you choose to read the book, and not take my word for it,
Try to understand my point of view.
Understand where I am coming from.
Vote to ban this inappropriate book;
Wake up and see how this book can ruin children's minds.
You must make a decision. What will it be



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#5 spell_balognax3

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Posted 21 October 2008 - 08:59 PM

FAKE SMILE

Look at you shine
Look at you glow
But that smile is fake
And no one will know.


GOODBYE

You leave without
An explanation.
You leave me
Without a heart.
And when my heart has come back
In fragments
You return.
Ready to take me back.
Expecting me to take you back.
You try to joke.
Try to make me smile
And try to make me laugh.
But
There’s no point in trying
You’re the last person
I want to smile for.


THAT MASK YOU WEAR

You hide so well
Beneath your mask.
That mask of happiness.
No one can penetrate
Your fake smile.
No one can see beyond
Your fake laugh.
No one can perceive
Your lying words.
Even you cannot see
That you are becoming
That mask you wear.
And now it's too late.
It's impossible to remove.
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Posted 22 October 2008 - 01:43 AM

what happened to the thread that was here before??
Anyways I ll post the poems again.
Here is the first one.

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~THAT NIGHT~

Why Were the Stars Shining So Brightly, I Wondered?
Maybe Just Like That
Why Was Everything So Pleasant That Night, I Pondered?
Maybe Just Like That.
All the Weird Things Happened That Day
Everything Seemed To Change In Every Way.
Something Was Different That Night
Strangely It Seemed Real, It Seemed Right
First I Thought It Was Déjà vu
Then the Feeling Was Completely New
At First It Was Hard To Admit
But Later Wooed By the Charm
Forgetting Everything Else, I Had To Submit
After All This Had Taken Place, One Day I Wondered
Why Was That Night So Beautiful?
What Had Happened? What Did I Do?
But Then Again… Maybe That Was Just You….


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Posted 22 October 2008 - 01:45 AM

One more!

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~IN THE MOVIE OF OUR LIFE~

In the movie of our life,
starring you and me.
Hollywood is in for a treat,
wait until they see.

The stage is all ours,
so let's put on a good show.
We act these roles so well,
but they will never know.

Shakespeare seems out of date,
Romeo and Juliet got old.
Boy they have nothing on us,
so let our story be told.

We write romance scenes,
like forever had no end.
It all comes so natural,
with an amazing boyfriend.

We've only gotten started,
the end is far from now.
Nothing can break us up,
not even a broken vow.

People watch the notebook,
is that all Hollywood's got? Boy, you and me alone,
make those scenes look hot.

They'll write a story one day,
and a movie to go with it.
Just get us to act it out,
It would be the greatest hit.

We may never be Hollywood's hottest,
Brad and Angelina will be in the past.
It will last as long as their careers,
but baby you and I will forever last.


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Posted 22 October 2008 - 01:52 AM

This poem is half written by me and the rest has chunks of songs here and there.
Hope you all like it.

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~INSEPARABLE~

What’s a Roller Coaster Ride?
I’ll Tell You,
Come Sit by My Side.
It’s nothing but the Feelings,
It’s All What We Feel Inside.
My Life’s a Roller Coaster Ride,
So is yours, But Everyone Else’s
It’s Just One Big Slide.
We started off with Friends,
Now we’re more,
Constantly I Think,
Why didn’t I Meet You Before?
Our Relation’s a Voyage.
We Have a Long Way to Go,
But With You near Me,
I Want It To Go Real Slow.
Without You I Would Be Incomplete, because
I Could Comb Across the World,
And See Everything, but Never Be Satisfied,
If I Just Couldn’t See Those Eyes.
And You Know,
When You Look Me in the Eyes,
And Tell Me That You Love Me,
Everything’s Alright,
When Right Here By My Side,
When You Look Me in the Eyes,
I Catch a Glimpse of Heaven,
I Find My Paradise,
When You Look Me in the Eyes,
I Just Sometimes Wonder,
Where Did I Go Right?
How Did I Get You?
How Come All This Blue Sky Is Around Me?
And You Found Me?
But I Just Shake the Thought Away,
It’s Just with You That I Wanna Stay
In The End I Would Just Like To Say,
Even Though, but I Wish Never
We May Part,
You’ll always be in My Heart
And when the darkness Rolls In,
I’ll be there through thick and thin.
Even when we’re Miles and Miles Apart,
You’ll still be Holding All of My Heart.
But Thinking about All This Is Jut Unbearable,
because After All……We’re Inseparable.

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#9 .::.dArQaNjIl.::.

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Posted 22 October 2008 - 03:12 AM

One more!

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~IN THE MOVIE OF OUR LIFE~

In the movie of our life,
starring you and me.
Hollywood is in for a treat,
wait until they see.

The stage is all ours,
so let's put on a good show.
We act these roles so well,
but they will never know.

Shakespeare seems out of date,
Romeo and Juliet got old.
Boy they have nothing on us,
so let our story be told.

We write romance scenes,
like forever had no end.
It all comes so natural,
with an amazing boyfriend.

We've only gotten started,
the end is far from now.
Nothing can break us up,
not even a broken vow.

People watch the notebook,
is that all Hollywood's got? Boy, you and me alone,
make those scenes look hot.

They'll write a story one day,
and a movie to go with it.
Just get us to act it out,
It would be the greatest hit.

We may never be Hollywood's hottest,
Brad and Angelina will be in the past.
It will last as long as their careers,
but baby you and I will forever last.


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Ha ha ha ha PLAGIARISM! I know who wrote that one. And it's ok. sHe wouldn't mind. =D
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Posted 22 October 2008 - 10:15 AM

.::.dArQaNjIl.::. : I know sHe (ahem-ahem)....wouldn't mind. That's why i posted it here. And watch out for the next one i post...


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Posted 22 October 2008 - 10:22 AM

Okay here is the one that is the best poem written by me.
Enjoy it!

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~ONCE AGAIN~

Oh there you are.
It’s so nice to see you.
I had seen you many times before.
But looking at you once again,
After all this time,
I love you so much more.

My heart stops with a thud.
Do you even remember me?
But then you call out my name.
Hearing your voice once again,
After all this time,
This crazy love makes me go insane.

I smile at you, dancing with joy inside.
And you come towards me,
With your breath taking smile,
Seeing your smile once again,
After all this time,
Makes so happy, as does a rescue ship
To a person abandoned on an Isle.

My heart goes crazy, as we hug,
The world seems Technicolor
With your mere touch,
And feeling your touch once again,
After all this time,
The rest of the universe doesn’t matter much.

I look at your eyes,
They’re still as deep as a sea,
Your love for me in them is all I can see.
Drowning in your eyes once again,
After all this time,
It’s for sure now, if not with you,
Where else would I be?

We walk with hands in hands,
A secret language we share.
Being with you once again,
After all this time,
About you and me is all I care.

We are nothing special,
But still remain extraordinary.
Feeling special once again,
After all this time,
Swooning with ecstasy seems involuntary.

Remembering all the times we had together,
The swears, the vows not to leave each other.
Reliving the past with you once again,
After all this time,
Makes me your for now and forever.

It’s your eyes, that do all the work,
Though you say nothing, I know it’s your love.
Knowing that you love me once again,
After all this time,
To me it means the world.

Now I know, everything’s fine,
because I have you here by my side.
Still some may ask – “Why?”
But being in love with you once again,
After all this time,
Leaves me with no regrets,
So in peace, I could die.



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Its a poem that is really close to my heart.....

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#12 Monday's Child

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Posted 22 October 2008 - 12:14 PM

I felt like writing a poem...

The Angels

We wanted to fly
To be free
But the truth was that we couldn’t
We were rocks at the bottom of the sea
And there was hope in the sky

We tried to grow wings
But nature refused us
Refused you
And our metal wings were consumed by rust
Back at square one with a disease of hate

We sat on the seabed
You sank into the sand
And I needed to stop you
I wanted to hold your hand
But you only slipped between my fingers

I lost you
My only friend in the entire ocean
And life left me alone
A pathetic, useless notion
As if it didn’t want a thing to do with me

And, suddenly, you emerged
From the grave I’d dug in your memory
We rejoiced, hugged each other
You said you had to forget the sky – them – or me
You chose the sky, the hope

And, for once, I slept with a smile


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#13 Ari-san

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Posted 23 October 2008 - 04:00 AM

what happened to the thread that was here before??

We start a new thread every time we hit 500 posts, hence, why we have a brand new one now. :)

ali :D
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Posted 23 October 2008 - 05:55 PM

She's in there
somewhere in the river
finally at peace
I went to the pier
where she was released
and cried
It's been 2 years
but every day I am reminded of her presence.
The cancer spread and soon
she was gone.
She had 14 years with me
my faithful little friend
and now she's with the river
floating above in Heaven
she is finally free

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#15 octoberoriole

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Posted 23 October 2008 - 06:04 PM

One chance

Once chance was all I had
and I blew it
One shot to prove myself
and I ended up losing
The finish line was so close
yet so far
It felt like miles until I reached it
My dad cheering at me from the stands
His baby girl
following in his track star footsteps
Would I win a trophy?
I was far behind the pack to realize.
The pressure was on and I pedaled through
Lap after lap, I sweated it with the best
Pushing myself to new heights,
my coach egging me on.
The final lap neared its ugly head and the gun blew off.
I sprinted across the field to victory
having the first round secured in my place
I was visualizing the gold medal in my hands
Then a new girl
A freshman, stole my thunder
She raced across the track and bounded away from me.
I raced past her but we were neck and neck
She beat me by a nanosecond
My last track race for the year
and I ended up with Bronze
One last chance to show the family honor,
and I ruined it.

That was ok.(So-so)Sorry about the choppy ending.
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Posted 24 October 2008 - 07:17 AM

She's in there
somewhere in the river
finally at peace
I went to the pier
where she was released
and cried
It's been 2 years
but every day I am reminded of her presence.
The cancer spread and soon
she was gone.
She had 14 years with me
my faithful little friend
and now she's with the river
floating above in Heaven
she is finally free



.....That poem was really good. It touched my heart.
But one question is stuck in the back of my head.
Is this poem about your friend or someone else?

A really awesome poem. Post some more.

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#17 JonasFever27

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Posted 24 October 2008 - 12:00 PM

This:

Don't blame me for all of This

Your not trying hard enough
To keep me close to you
Your not listening long enough
To hear that I hurt too

You
Let me go
You
Opened the door
You
Told me you don't need me
Anymore

So just don't blame me for all of This
I had no say in any of This
I never wanted to be a part of This
Someone help me out of This

All of This
None of This
I just want to feel more than This


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#18 octoberoriole

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Posted 25 October 2008 - 06:32 PM




.....That poem was really good. It touched my heart.
But one question is stuck in the back of my head.
Is this poem about your friend or someone else?

A really awesome poem. Post some more.

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It was about my cat Kyd. We released her into the Potomac River and the day before I went to pay my respects to her, I wrote that.
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#19 spell_balognax3

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Posted 25 October 2008 - 07:51 PM

I don't know who wrote "In the Movie of Our Life" XP, but I really like it.

Monday's Child: I really like "The Angels". Very good writing.

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Posted 26 October 2008 - 09:30 AM

spell_balognax3: Thanks a lot. I posted "In the movie of our life". Actually a friend had written and given it to me. Obviously with a few different words...ahem....it was really very cute so i posted it here.

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#21 Monday's Child

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Posted 27 October 2008 - 12:52 PM

spell_balognax3: Thanks a bunch. The Angels is probably the closest thing to an epic poem that I've ever written, so I'm glad you like it! :D

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Posted 28 October 2008 - 02:45 AM

Okay two more!

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~THE MEET~

In the cinnamon scented darkness, I stumbled
Eating marshmallows seemed the only thing I could do,
All my Elvis records sounded so mumbled,
Until the happenstance of meeting you.

^ This one was given to me by a friend...

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~MY LOVE~

Call it my love, if you may,
It's everything but bluff.
But for coming into my life,
I couldn't thank you enough.
And now I just have to confess,
I love you completely and nothing less.
I know this sounds like a cheesy line,
But honestly, looking at you,
All my heart can do is shine...

^ I wrote this one on my own.

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Hope you like these. I know they are short but they were instant so I couldn't think of more. I ll post more later.

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Posted 28 October 2008 - 12:15 PM

We have to write haikus for school

So i decided to write a three word haiku:

Lesbianism.
Homosexuality.
Discrimination.


You think that would count?

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#24 spell_balognax3

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Posted 28 October 2008 - 07:16 PM

Okay two more!

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~THE MEET~

In the cinnamon scented darkness, I stumbled
Eating marshmallows seemed the only thing I could do,
All my Elvis records sounded so mumbled,
Until the happenstance of meeting you.

^ This one was given to me by a friend...

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~MY LOVE~

Call it my love, if you may,
It's everything but bluff.
But for coming into my life,
I couldn't thank you enough.
And now I just have to confess,
I love you completely and nothing less.
I know this sounds like a cheesy line,
But honestly, looking at you,
All my heart can do is shine...

^ I wrote this one on my own.

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Hope you like these. I know they are short but they were instant so I couldn't think of more. I ll post more later.

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I like them both! Your friend's made me laugh at the, "Eating marshmallows seemed the only thing I could do" line. XP

We have to write haikus for school

So i decided to write a three word haiku:

Lesbianism.
Homosexuality.
Discrimination.


You think that would count?

amber


I like the message you're trying to send, though it depends on your teacher if it would be appopriate for school. So use your own judgement, but I like it.
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Posted 28 October 2008 - 07:57 PM

Theres no problem about the appropriateness.

Just wondering if it still counts as long as it has 5-7-5 syllables.

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Posted 28 October 2008 - 09:01 PM

Yeah, I think it would work. I even sounded it out and counted on my fingers to make sure. XP
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Posted 29 October 2008 - 09:13 AM

spell_balognax3: Thanks. And yeah, that line had me laughing my brains out too. When i asked him how he came up with that line...he was like- "What Could i do? Nothing else was fitting." He's weird sometimes.


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Posted 31 October 2008 - 12:24 PM

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love is crazy feeling
love is odd
love is yearning to be with you
love is kissing on a boat ride
love is sharing your I-Pod on the train
love is a stupid smile
love is dancing in the rain
love is
a blur on a train
that just passed by


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Posted 02 November 2008 - 05:27 AM

octoberoriole: That was such a sweet poem!!! Loved it! Give it a name!!

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Posted 02 November 2008 - 11:08 AM

octoberoriole: That was such a sweet poem!!! Loved it! Give it a name!!

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I don't know what to call it. When I wrote it on the bus I just called it "#13".
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Posted 05 November 2008 - 04:48 PM

Hey guys. I dont post here often although I write alot of poetry only because almost all my poems have a mention of self-harm to them =/ So i am not alowed to post them here. My friends love them but I would really love comments from people other than my close friends. I think these ones arnt that great considered to my other ones... but I am the author so I need other opinions cause my friends like these ones too. So I am going to post the ones that I think are appropriate enough for MCMB. =) Let me know what you think please? :aiwebs_014:

Leaving Those Four Walls Behind
10/16/08

What is there behind this closed window?
Is there a world where I can be happy?
A world where I can be free?
A world that will allow me to breathe?

Could I find someone I love?
And someone who loves me?
What happened lately?
Everything is falling apart.

Suddenly these four walls are too small for me,
But fear keeps me inside.
Not knowing what to expect outside of these four walls.
Hesitantly reaching for the latch,

Lifting the pane and climbing outside.
I'm suffocating and there's only one way out.
Before I can change my mind.
Before I can let the opportunity pass me by.

As I walk outside of my four walls,
It’s all so different.
I can be who I want to be.
I can do what I want to do.

I quickly found him,
Who I was searching for.
There he is,
Standing before me with open arms.

Is he why I needed to leave those old four walls behind?
I can breathe now.
I am happy now.
He certainly must be why I am out here.

I left those old four walls,
I left them far behind.
Knowing now where I fit in
I will never be within those dark four walls again.


Walking
10/27/08

Bare trees above my head,
Colored leaves beneath my feet.
The sun gently shining through the clouds,
Warming me with its presence.

Walking through the woods,
Knowing every stump and rock.
Feeling more at home here,
Than anywhere else.

Watching my surroundings,
As I slowly take it in.
Nature seems so perfect,
But everything has its time.

As the leaves fall from the trees,
The trees feel all alone.
The birds, the leaves have left them,
They have left their homes.

We all must leave at some point,
But most of us will go back.
We just can’t stay away from our perfection,
It continues to call us back.


Falling
10/30/08

Staring at my feet,
Tears falling to the ground.
What’s happened to me lately?
Feels like I’m falling down.

Things were so perfect…
But that was yesterday.
Yesterday I was up,
But today I’m breaking down.

What did I do wrong?
Seems like it’s always me,
The one who gets held up…
Only to come crashing down.

Why… me? Why… him?
Did it have to fall apart?
Couldn’t things work out for us?
Maybe just this once…

I guess it’s over now,
Not rising up this time.
Staying on the ground for good,
So I can’t fall again.


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Ruins
10/31/08

Looking out over the ruins,
A city has fallen to dust.
This is what can happen,
When people don’t learn to trust.

As people grew,
Their lies did too.
Falsehood, desception,
Can break society in two.

As people stay apart,
Instead of working together,
The city man created,
Will fall to its creator.

Lies can ruin a city,
Lies can twist a life.
The truth may try to hold you up,
But the lies will tear you down.

Looking out over the ruins,
Of a city that fell to lies.
This city is my life,
Lies have broken it down with time.


Those are just the 'appropriate' ones from October 08. I have more but they mention some self-harm so I shouldn't post them so I dont get in trouble with the Mods.

Let me know what you guys think? Please and Thankyou?

~Abby :020:

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Posted 07 November 2008 - 07:55 AM

Hey Abby! Those poems were really nice.
Though there weren't any rhyming words, the poems still had deep meaning.
I really like "Ruins". It was great.
And so was "Walking". Both these poems tell so much about the art of living!

"Leaving these Four Walls Behind" and "Falling" are awesome too. They describe the feeling so well!

I really liked the way you write!
Please post some more poems of yours.

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Posted 07 November 2008 - 10:09 AM

Okay! I wrote another poem yesterday. I good really very nice reviews from my friends for this one. Hope you all like it too. It's a little long but I couldn't help but write everything I felt about the topic. Please read and comment about it. I'll appreciate it very much.
Here you all go.

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~*WHERE ARE YOU*~


A question nags me,
Where are you?
I think I know the answer.
But I am unsure that it’s true.

I remember you,
When down the street,
Me and my friends walk.
Then I know where you are.
You are there in the way I talk.

I remember you,
When someone calls my name,
Though it’s not you who calls,
Then I know where you are.
You are in the way I hear it all.

I remember you,
When I look in the mirror,
The way you used to look at me.
Then I know where you are,
You are in the way I can see.

I remember you,
When touch something,
It reminds me of when I was head over heels.
Then I know where you are,
You are in the way I feel.

I remember you,
When I take in the air,
I get your fragrance in it.
Then I know where you are,
You are in the way I breathe.

I remember you,
When I get a feeling,
You are somewhere near me,
Then I know where you are,
But this can’t be true.
Because this isn’t where you could be.

I remember you,
When I wake up at night,
You are like the water that flows in a stream,
Then I know where you are,
You are in the way I see a dream.

I remember you,
In every single thing I do,

How I wish I could resist,
Then I know where you are,
You are in the way I exist.

I remember you,
As every minute and second pass,
What am I supposed to do?
Then I know where you are,
I can see your face in the book in front of me too.

But on second thoughts,
Maybe these answers are really true.
You are present in the whole wide space,
But except one place,
The one place where you should really be,
Is the empty space next to me…


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This poem is REALLY very close to my heart. I actually cried while writing the last three stanzas.
I know at some places I dragged it a little bit long, but for letting the whole idea sink in, it was important i write everything.
But still comments are open.
Please say something about it.

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Posted 07 November 2008 - 10:11 AM

I m sorry I did one mistake in the previous post.


I good really very nice reviews


should be

I got really nice reviews

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Posted 08 November 2008 - 02:56 AM

This is for my ex-friend, Ambika. This poem only constitutes 0.001% of my hate towards her and her little group.

I Hate You

What you did to me,
I never expected
That it would ever come from you,
I never suspected.

I hate you
Why couldn't I see?
I blindly believed you,
So now I just hate me.

Backstabber, liar
I though we were friends
Wh.ore, bi+ch
But you proved me wrong in the end.

I stood by you through everything,
Did I ever do you wrong?
You could've told me, but you didn't
Even though we were friends for so long.

Fickle and materialistic you are,
But I don't care anymore
I have everything I need
And I will never need you, that's sure.

So in answer to your question,
No, I don't have a problem with you.
I don't care anymore,
I only hate you.


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Posted 08 November 2008 - 03:15 AM

eek. NT for a second i thought that was aimed a tme.

Because people clal me Ambika sometimes.

Though i hate it.

Lolz.

Awesome poem though.
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Posted 08 November 2008 - 05:40 AM

It's on FB too. =D

Thanks!

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Posted 08 November 2008 - 11:06 AM

Hey Abby! Those poems were really nice.
Though there weren't any rhyming words, the poems still had deep meaning.
I really like "Ruins". It was great.
And so was "Walking". Both these poems tell so much about the art of living!

"Leaving these Four Walls Behind" and "Falling" are awesome too. They describe the feeling so well!

I really liked the way you write!
Please post some more poems of yours.

*♥Suki♥*


Hey,

Thanks Suki. Yea I dont really like writing poems that rhyme because to me they sound forced and unnatural. With me it just flows out all at once and then I tweak it after and this is what happens lol

I actually came up with a few more within the past week or so. I'll put them up.

Thanks for the comments Suki :a_smil08:

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The Story in Your Eyes
11/6/08


Staring through the glass,
Water droplets on the pane,
Through them I see your eyes.
And those eyes reflect your pain.

Through your eyes I can see,
A story you cannot stand to tell.
A story you hate remembering,
About a time when you had fell.

Those eyes have given me comfort,
Those eyes have given me hope.
Though sometimes when I think of them,
I cannot help but weep.

The story written within them,
Is not a happy one.
And only those who know them best,
Can read the writing there.

The writing there is concealed,
Under the mask he keeps on.
That mask makes him appear,
Like life is really OK, when you that it is not.

I can see through you now,
Knowing you so well.
I kindof feel like I know you better,
Than I even know myself.

You’ve become a part of me.
I don’t know what to say.
Or how to express my feelings,
About you these days.

You have a life worth living for.
Never throw that away.
Please remember,
Tomorrow is always a brand new day.




Unexpected
11/7/08


Walking over,
I didn’t expect to find,
Someone who would mean so much to me,
At least not so soon.

Shaking hands,
There was something there.
I didn’t know yet,
But there always would be too.

Knowing you,
My walls were broken down.
Couldn’t hide anymore,
I was naked around you.

Facing the truth,
Letting it all out.
Telling you everything,
Before I told myself.

Getting to know you,
Learning more each day.
Never wanting to leave you,
I began to fade away.

My mind wandered off,
Did you like me too?
How did someone so distant from me,
Become a part of me so soon?

Caught off guard,
What’s happened to me now?
Something here is different,
But it feels so right.

All these feelings on my mind,
Is it just a waste of time?
Why would you care what’s on my mind?
Have I opened up too much?

I tell you everything,
But is everything too much?
Am I only going to fall?
Should I maybe just shut up?

Somebody tell me what I’m feeling.
I’ve never felt so lost,
But at the same time I feel found.
It’s all so unexpected.



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Suki! Your ~*WHERE ARE YOU*~ poem was great! I know what you mean, I have very similar feelings to someone very, VERY close to me. You expressed those feelings so well. I liked it alot. Almost got me crying a little bit too.

~ Abby :020:
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Posted 08 November 2008 - 12:58 PM

I'll remember Friday


It's raining outside
but I can still hear your voice
It echoes inside me
I'll remember Friday
The day you came
and we ruled the world
I was finally free.
Years later,
a crash erupted.
A scene embedded forever in my memory.
It happened to be a Friday.
I saw it live on the news and froze.
Please God, not him.
Your white BMW in ruins,
a drunk driver stole you away.
I refused to believe it until
a photo flashed across the screen.
Please God, not now.
My heart nearly collapsed when I saw it.
We had talked the day before,
I was mad at you but you told me:
I'll remember Friday
A day forever with me now.
I miss you.



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Posted 08 November 2008 - 09:25 PM

Singerchick 14: WOW...Just W-O-W!! Those were really great poems there. Unexpected was REALLY cool. The Story In Your Eyes was very well written! And it sometime is a little irritating to write the whole thing with rhyming words. The last stanza I wrote in "Where Are You" was the one that had the most severe effect on me. What do you say about "Once Again"? That one is a nice one too...it's for the time when I meet the person again. It's a poem that kind of cheers me up that I ll see him and the next moment I become sad because I don't know when. It's crazy.

But you still keep posting more and more and more.........
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octoberoriole: I'll remember Friday was so touching! I shouldn't ask but is it from personal experience? Because the way you have written it, it seems that you really felt all this. It was awesome. Really cool.
Post some more!

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.::.dArQaNjIl.::. : You posted it here too! YAY! And WHAT???? It's on FB too? where?? I didn't see it anywhere. Well anyways, I told you already, I ll say it again. This was such a good poem!! You still hate her deeply don't you? But we ll talk about this in school.
Have anymore more of your works?

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Posted 08 November 2008 - 09:37 PM



octoberoriole: I'll remember Friday was so touching! I shouldn't ask but is it from personal experience? Because the way you have written it, it seems that you really felt all this. It was awesome. Really cool.
Post some more!

Nope. I was upset at the person that I wrote about in the poem but he called me today and we're cool now. He was watching the news and told me about an accident on TV and that of emerged from my head.(He thought my poem was odd). :lol:


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Posted 09 November 2008 - 12:55 AM

After knowing the reason.......it does seem odd. i thought you had written it in memory of someone...n you have but i thought that that someone would be...dead....not alive. Anyways still a good poem!!

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Posted 09 November 2008 - 07:02 AM

You CAN use my name, you know, loser.

And, thank you.

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Posted 09 November 2008 - 11:58 AM

Every time I see that photo
I wonder
Did I ever cross your mind?
An artistic deep soul,
You were the one that got away.
Years later, you resurface and yet
why must the feelings come back?
So many things I want to say
but bottle them up instead.
What would you do if you saw me on the street?
Give me the cold shoulder?
I have cried over you
and written many songs
yet every time you resurface
I wonder
Would it have worked out between us?
Two different souls who were once one,
a part of my history lost into oblivion.
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Posted 14 November 2008 - 09:53 AM

I have written this poem for my "About me" column on MCMB.
Hope you like it.
It's a bit long.
But read till the end.

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~*ME, MYSELF AND I*~

It's not all that long.
Fourteen years of age.
But believe me, all my friends,
I have been through every stage.

Friends I had many,
But faithful were very few,
Still like a fool always,
I search for people new.

They say I m spineless,
That I can't do anything on my own.
I don't deny it,
because it's the only side I have shown.

They take me for granted,
It's always been this scene.
I don't say anything,
As I wanna be the friend that they have never been.

They say I m a loser,
That I m good for nothing.
I just smile when they tell me,
But inside it hurts like anything.

They say I m cute,
I thank them for that,
Maybe they really mean it,
But then why am I mocked at?

Some bonds like this have vanished,
Now they are a part of the past.
But few of these friends...
I wish they had last.

But not all have been this shallow,
Some have been through thick and thin,
I cherish those buds with love,
As they will always be within.

I hope the ones I have now,
Or make in the future,
Will like me for what I am,
because friends are one thing I truly nurture.

True Love, the one thing in my life,
Has been placed above all.
It always sparkles in my heart,
It's the thing that doesn't let me fall.

It remains with me till the end,
because all around me, it's present,
In my soulmate, my friends and in my family,
and in every moment, with them, that I have spent.


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It's actually really weird when I read the poem again.
It's completely irrelevant to the title, to the topic, "About me".....
But I don't know I still posted it.
I think I really wanted these feelings of mine to be shown.
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Ignore me, I AM insane...

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