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#181 <3Cheese<3

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Posted 05 December 2010 - 10:43 PM

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#182 Dramagirl221

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Posted 06 December 2010 - 01:22 PM

Okay. Here is the next, and final chapter.
Yes, that's right. This is the last chapter.
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But don't worry! I'm not done writing! I'm going to start writing an original story. It's not a fanfiction but I hope you guys will read it.......?
Anyway. Here is the last chapter, enjoy.

Chapter twenty nine:

A brief summary of what happened after I heard those words:

A million exclamation points went off in my head.

I asked him for details. Turns out a nurse had gotten tired and went into her room to take a quick nap. She’d just been dozing off in the chair by Violet’s bed, when she heard Violet say, “Oh my God,” and start looking around the room.

The nurse had immediately run to tell the doctors. It appeared that all the pesticide poisoning had cleared out of her blood and she’d randomly come alive again.

I’d thanked him, made plans to go to the hospital, and called Paul and Jesse (in that order). Then I’d told the rest of the family.

So now I was sitting in the waiting room with Jesse, Paul and (Surprise!) Ella. The lawyers or whoever was watching over Ella Clark and Katie had let Ella out from under their watchful eye long enough for her to pay a visit to Violet.

“Uh,” she said while we waited. “This is….surprising.”

Paul nodded next to me, in a daze. “Yeah…”

She cleared her throat and looked at us. “I just wanted to say how sorry I was……….. I should’ve just told you guys that it was Katie.”

I glanced at her out of the corner of my eye. “What was your secret that was so important that you would tell someone to hurt someone in order for it not to get out?”

She looked down at her hands. “I…………I wasn’t always a very good person. Not that I think I am now but I used to be, well, really bad.”

I waited. She didn’t say anything more.

The nurse came out and cleared her throat. “She’s awake but… very tired. You won’t be able to stay very long.”

Paul hopped up. “That’s okay!”

I sighed. I guess I would just have to go without knowing Ella’s secret. It was her business anyway.

The nurse led us through a million different hallways and finally stopped in front of a room. She opened the door and we filed in.

My breath caught in my throat when I saw her. She was sitting up in bed looking at Seventeen magazine. She just looked so…….alive. I remember having the same thoughts about Jesse when he came back alive.

Except Jesse hadn’t been reading Seventeen.

Paul stopped in his tracks next to me and stood staring at her. She looked up.

“Oh hey,” she said in this totally offhand way. I couldn’t believe she’d been dead for a few weeks and the only thing she had to say now that she was back alive was: Oh hey. She seemed more like the jump up and down screaming type of girl.

“Violet..” Paul said. He sounded slightly strangled. I gave him a push forward.

“How’s it going?” she asked, setting the magazine down on the bed next to her.

“How’s it going????!!!” I exploded. “You’ve been dead for such a long time,” (well, kind of long) “and all you have to say is how’s it going???”

She smiled and shrugged. “Being dead calmed me down. Not that I’m not totally happy to be a live again..” She saw Ella and paused. “Hi.”

“Hi,” Ella shifted uncomfortably in the doorway. She took a step forward and sunk by the bed. “Look,”

“I know you’re sorry, I know you feel horrible, I know you want to beg for forgiveness, but don’t. It’s annoying.” Violet held up her hand.

“I never would have done it if I knew you were going to die from it well sort of,” Ella said in a rush.

Violet shoved her hand in Ella’s face. I smiled.

“Maybe we’d better give Paul and Violet some privacy,” Jesse said.

“Good idea,” Ella stood up. She followed us out of the room.

I leaned against the wall and grinned. “I’ll bet Paul is happy that she’s alive.”

“He got a happy ending too,” Jesse said.

Ella looked uncomfortably at me, than Jesse, then back at me. “Right well…. I’m just gonna
go…” she said.

I had a flashback of the first time I saw Ella, and how anxious and odd she was acting.

She wasn’t acting like someone she wasn’t
, I realized. That’s just how she is.

“Bye,” I said. She waved and walked away.

I looked back through the time just in time to see Paul lean over and give Violet a kiss.



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“WHERE ARE THE LUCKY CHARMS?????” Dopey yelled in my ear, surprising me.

“They’re in the dining room. I’m having a lucky charms party, remember?”

“Am I invited?” Sleepy asked from the doorway, crunching on a piece of toast.

I groaned. “I bought three boxes but I’m beginning to see we may need more.”

Jesse, Paul, CeeCee, Adam, Violet, and the three dwarfs were all coming over to celebrate
Violet’s non deadness.

It was three weeks later and Violet was out of the hospital. She was leaving soon to New York towards her prize, promising to stay in touch with Paul, who had never been more in love. Well he might’ve been that in love with me, but with no one else as far as I knew.

The doorbell rang. Violet hopped up to get it. Paul stood in the doorway with a banquet of roses and presented them to her.

The rest showed up soon, and we all sat down to eat my favorite cereal.

“Seriously?” Violet scoffed. “A lucky charms party? That’s not exactly a party food…”

I munched on a marshmallow and smiled. “It’s pretty popular around here.”

“Are you kidding?” Adam yelped. “The first two boxes are already gone?”

I paused with the spoon halfway up to my mouth and glared at my three stepbrothers, who gave me blank looks.

“You ate too much anyway,” CeeCee said.

I hopped up. “Does anyone need more milk?”

A chorus of food filled, “Yeahs,” drifted up from the table.

I skipped into the kitchen and reached into the fridge. Mom came in and gave me a weird look.
“Is everything alright?” she asked me, glancing at the milk in my hand.

“Yep,” I grinned. “Everything is totally fine.”


THE END.

So there you go.

Rather than just commenting on that chapter, can you also comment on the whole story? ^_^

Ahh it's over.
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#183 Jcrazy

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Posted 06 December 2010 - 05:17 PM

I kind of think of this as a happy ending or Paul. I felt like he was the only one who wasn't rEEEEally happy at the end of the last book.

It was well written and I loved the frequent updates :)

And of course I'll read your original story!

Great job and congrats for finishing! Not many finish fanfics. :)

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#184 Dramagirl221

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Posted 07 December 2010 - 01:42 PM

I'll leave this up for a bit longer so that everyone who was reading it can finish (if they want to...) and then I'll askt the mods to put it in the archives.

@Jcrazy
Yeah I almost wish that instead of having Paul apologize, they'd have just punished him really badly :icon_geek:
But he apologized, so for that he gets a happy ending.
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#185 bookwormwriter98

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Posted 07 December 2010 - 05:23 PM

this was OH MY GOD..
seriously!!!!!
yay, violet ALIVE!!!!!
Clark being live IS a positive i guess, but he wasnt my fave.........
anyways THE END!!!!!!

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#186 bookwormwriter98

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Posted 07 December 2010 - 05:26 PM

oops didn't see page 5 (by the way :*GRATZ!*: )
lol, lucky charms party
YAY PAUL AND VIOLET 4EVAR!!!!!!!!!!

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Posted 07 December 2010 - 06:03 PM

That was really good. It even sounds like the Suze Simon I've come to know and love. I can't wait to hear what happens next. Love it! Hope to hear more soon. :icon_flower:
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#188 Dramagirl221

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Posted 07 December 2010 - 06:19 PM

@Bookwormwriter89
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Did you see the page 5?? The story's over. I'm glad you liked it though! :)
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#189 Dramagirl221

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Posted 09 December 2010 - 04:06 PM

New story up! It's called "They call me Kat," please check it out!
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#190 bookwormwriter98

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Posted 09 December 2010 - 04:14 PM

yeah, imma check it out ASAP :)

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#191 <3Cheese<3

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Posted 09 December 2010 - 04:36 PM

Amazing
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Posted 09 December 2010 - 08:00 PM

That is so good!! I wish i could right like that! by the way UPDATE PLLLEEEEEAAAAAASSSSSEEEEE! PRETTY PLEASE WITH A CHERRY ON TOP! (enless you dont like cherries, then there isnt a cherry on top)
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Posted 09 December 2010 - 08:03 PM

That is so good!! I wish i could right like that! by the way UPDATE PLLLEEEEEAAAAAASSSSSEEEEE! PRETTY PLEASE WITH A CHERRY ON TOP! (enless you dont like cherries, then there isnt a cherry on top)

waaaaiiiiiitttt nevermind my computer just wasnt showing the whole page sorry =P
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#194 Dramagirl221

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Posted 09 December 2010 - 08:15 PM

lol.

Glad you like it! :lol:
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Posted 11 December 2010 - 02:46 PM

Wow... Just...... Wow.
I love it so much I'm so devastated it's over. :icon_mecry2: :heartbeat:
Awww..... That was awesome....... I really love how you brought all this writing to life. Congrats :eusa_clap:
I totally love the emotional roller coaster you have put me through.
Last but not least... Where can I find your story????
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#196 Dramagirl221

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Posted 11 December 2010 - 03:05 PM

Wow... Just...... Wow.
I love it so much I'm so devastated it's over. :icon_mecry2: :heartbeat:
Awww..... That was awesome....... I really love how you brought all this writing to life. Congrats :eusa_clap:
I totally love the emotional roller coaster you have put me through.
Last but not least... Where can I find your story????



I'm so glad you like it!!!!

Go to "Writing club" (not fan fiction) and scroll down until you find 'They call me Kat' it's towards the bottom.
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Posted 12 December 2010 - 11:40 PM

I'm so glad you like it!!!!

Go to "Writing club" (not fan fiction) and scroll down until you find 'They call me Kat' it's towards the bottom.

K thanks I'll check itout!!!!

Ps have u read the 1800WHERERYOU series? because if you have I was just wondering if the series was really made into a tv show.. If haven't then it's ok
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#198 Dramagirl221

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Posted 13 December 2010 - 12:39 PM

K thanks I'll check itout!!!!

Ps have u read the 1800WHERERYOU series? because if you have I was just wondering if the series was really made into a tv show.. If haven't then it's ok



I just started reading it, I'm currently on 'Safe house.'

And I have no idea if it's getting into a TV show. If it is, I won't see it, because I don't have cable so....
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Posted 13 December 2010 - 10:41 PM

Ohhh... Well that's ok!!! I just started missing you today... I'll try to see if somebody else knows.... thanks anyways!!!
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Posted 16 December 2010 - 04:54 PM

actually, they did, but it was nothing like the book and got canceled due to lack of more ideas
i never watched but part 1 of ep 1 via youtube.

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Posted 05 March 2011 - 09:14 AM

I love this story!! Especially because Paul gets a happy ending, and I felt bad for him at the end of the real Mediator series :)
Anyway, maybe you should do a sequel to this one day? I'm sure everyone would read it :D

xoxo Suze :heartbeat:
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#202 Dramagirl221

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Posted 05 March 2011 - 04:16 PM

Thanks :) And maybe.... although fanfiction is kind of hard to write, but hmm I don't know.

I was reading this over for old times sake when and I realized it has WAYYYY too much dialogue. There's not enough just her thoughts, or describing stuff, or action (while there's ACTION, but not very many paragraphs without dialogue).

Also, it seems like EVERY chapter ends with a cliffhanger. Not good!

But yeah. :icon_smurf:

Edited by Dramagirl221, 05 March 2011 - 04:17 PM.

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#203 Mervisko

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Posted 05 January 2012 - 11:16 AM

Hey! I've just finished reading it and it is totally awesome! You are a great writer. It made me happy that Paul had a happy ending. :)
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