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Here is the first chapter:
I guess I start this story by telling you who I am and what means the very most to me. My name is Melanie Austen, daughter of Andrew and Wendy Austen. I live in Cornwall and have done so for most of my life. I have known Jack Carter since the age of four. A long time but thankfully we are still as close as we had been ever since he dumped dirt down my dress. Even though it sounds like a strange way to befriend someone, it's true. He was always looking out for me.
Which leads me onto what matters most to me in the world; friends. Well for a long time Jack had meant so much more to me than simple friendship would allow. Much more than best-friendship would allow. No, I felt, even from a young age, that this could possibly be the very boy who I was 'destined' to live the rest of my life with.
Though I would be totally embarrassed if he read that I thought that, seeing as he doesn't know and well, they're my thoughts and they should be my very own secret.
My story starts with my leaving home; it's not as dramatic as that sounds, it was a geography trip, to the county of Dorset which I had only ever passed through driving up to my hometown of Sheffield to visit relatives. Now dear readers, if you read on, you will travel with me on the trip which would change my life (for the better) forever.
Even when he was asleep he was gorgeous I literally couldn't take my eyes off him. Him, with his entrancing brown eyes and dark brown hair. All I wanted to do was rest my head on his welcoming chest. There was barely enough room for the two of us on this creaky old bus chair, but we'd squeezed onto it somehow. I had hoped that it was because he couldn't bear to be parted from me but I knew that was all in my head. There was no chance he loved me I was just his best friend, he would never think of me as anything else. Which was good in some cases but not in others. It was good because it's always a dilemma when you love your best guy friend; it never progresses smoothly.
I shook my head, banishing the thoughts that frequently passed through my mind, telling myself I was being stupid to do this to myself. Sadly I had stirred him and he looked up, a tuft of hair protruding out of the back of his head and his eyes still half-closed sleepily. I smiled to myself and said,
"So you're finally awake sleepy-head!"
"Huh, I wasn't asleep," I rolled my eyes, always trying to be macho when it was obvious he was just a big softie more than anything else.
I stared out of the window, watching the bus leave behind the Cornish countryside and heading into the county of Dorset into which I had never set foot before. I felt Jack fidget next to me so I turned around and looked at him. I looked directly into his eyes which as usual was a mistake, every time I look into those eyes, I feel myself sink into them never to return. I don't exactly know if I mind falling into his eyes, but while I'm there I know that nothing will hurt me. I allowed my eyes to linger for a moment longer before tearing them reluctantly away.
He then turned around to talk to Jade, oh how could I forget about her? The main reason the course of our love would never run smoothly. The person Jack thought he loved, how I hated to see them together, she gave him so much false hope then shot him down. That's when he comes to me, asking what he did wrong and to comfort him. Couldn't he see that she wasn't good enough for perfect him? That she was merely a ^$#@$^^ that flirted with anything that moved. I could feel my anger starting to take over me so I checked myself and put on a smile and turned around as well.
"So this is fun" I said sarcastically "Sleepy-head over here was asleep the whole way leaving me bored out of my mind."
"Well I think he looks cute asleep; don't you think he looks cute Mel?" Jade said in her usual whiny voice, why she had to drag me in I don’t know. In my minds eye a pen was sticking out of Jade's forehead, and yes, this girl was supposed to be my friend, admittedly she didn't know how I felt for Jack but she could try to be less flirty!
I slumped back into my seat mumbling that sure he looked cute, when Jack also went back into his seat and poked me, in the side, hard.
"Oi! That's mean, I wasn’t paying attention. And for that, you will pay!" At that I practically jumped on him poking him viciously. He then practically screamed
"All right that's enough, my sides ache now leave me alone." So as usual I gave him one last poke and then got off of his torso. I used to love those moments but lately, I just want him to stop me getting off of him and for him to just let me lay there. It just reminds me how unlikely us ever getting together really is.
"So how's it going with Jade?" I whispered, trying to sound truly interested, which I was, to see how long I had left to live because if Jack went out with Jade I think I would rather die than watch them together.
"Oh I don’t know, she throws out all the signals but I'm just not getting the right vibe from her" His voiced drooped and my heart went out to him.
'That’s because she's a ^$#@$^^' I thought to myself but I couldn't say that could I?
"Oh, well I'm sure she'll come around" I reluctantly said. Sometimes I hate myself, I really do.
"I hope so," Jack said before settling down to another snooze. I watched him drop of I looked down his face until I came upon his lips, which looked so soft and inviting...
I sat there, pretending to be asleep but really I was looking out of the corner of my eye at Mel silently dropping off to sleep. I hadn't really been asleep before, I was watching her watching me. I had tried to keep the smile off of my face when I thought of my plan. I then thought of the latest lie I had had to tell Mel about my apparent love for Jade, when I didn't really like her anymore than a dung beetle, but I knew how she loved to flirt and so I used that to my advantage. Yeah, make Mel jealous and then she'll have to tell me. Little would she know that I was already there, waiting to make my move and secure the love of my life.
I thought back to all those days back in year 2 when they had been made to sit next to each other and how I'd terrorised her just to have some way to make her notice me. I hadn't known how to handle it any other way.
I felt a sudden pressure on his shoulder and Mel’s' head slumped against me. I opened my eyes and looked down at her face, her perfect, beautiful, intelligent face, framed in vibrant golden blonde hair which shimmered in the sunlight. I could hardly hold back the kiss that I'd longed to plant on her soft plump lips for over eight years. But somehow I restrained myself and gently placed my head on her soft hair and drifted off to sleep.
My main change is that it's all going to be in first person, including Jack's POV.
Hope you like it and comment please!!