First of all—the dialogue. It's always impressive but I'll just make it formal here. Your dialogue between all the characters is golden. It's so freaking entertaining and on point and I just want to write like that dammit. I want to quote it all.
Michael folded his hands and leaned forward. “Let’s call him Art,” he said. Marcus let out a “hell yeah” and high-fived him from across the table. The more Marcus spoke, the less of a grip I had on my quickly fading Zen.—I visualized this so well it kind of scares me.
Your introduction of the new client/mark/situation was well paced and seemed equally as thought out. You gave just enough detail for me to get a clear picture but not too much that I'm bored. BRILLIANT, I say. Brilliant. Am I being annoying yet?
“Hush money, dumbass” Marcus replied, shaking his head. “You don’t ‘accidentally’ let out a huge secret and then let someone stew with the info. You pay ‘em to keep their fu/cking mouth shut.”—beautifully put, Marcus. I love you..
She exhaled in unintentional mimicry of Ellis, who habitually did the same each time Marcus spoke.—It's weird how she's mimicking Ellis now. What's next? Excessive public displays of affection? Gross. Funny. I actually pointed this out because I thought it was nicely worded. Sorry for the other comment. Hah.
He winked. “I got you.”—I will say this again. It's scare how well I visualized this. Killed me. Marcus is bae.
Okay. Back to business. As far as backstory stuff goes, it didn't bother me in the slightest. Could be the hour at which I'm reading for just that you're an awesome writer. Probably wasn't fun to write but I enjoyed reading it. I did. Honestly. I'm not over exaggerating.
Anyway, I'm sure there is plenty of other stuff I could say but I can't seem to make up my mind on what to say and what to leave out so I'm sorry but I'll just have to leave you hanging this time. Just know that me not being able to say anything else is actually a compliment in disguise. I promise.
Keep it coming!
Side note: remind me please who Adrian is? It's been a while, sorry...